Cinquain Poem
Catching you
Now
In this
Fleeting moment
To explain my feelings
Because I need to speak aloud
posted by Katie @ 12:14 PM
3 comments
Catching you
Now
In this
Fleeting moment
To explain my feelings
Because I need to speak aloud
posted by Katie @ 12:14 PM
3 comments
3 Comments:
Hey Katie! In line three, you have a verb phrase when it should be a noun phrase. I looked up fleeting in the thesaurus. It gave me "momentary." Is that a noun? What do you think?
I think in this case fleeting is modifying moment which is the headword of the noun phrase, so the third stanza is indeed a NP
Evening, Katie. Yours is a great poem, but I’m unsure if line two is actually a prepositional phrase. This is a demonstrative, and (I think) a prep. phrase requires an object. But maybe this can function similar to that in relative clauses (as a subject or dir. object)? Whatever the case, the poem is very smooth with fantastic rhythm!! :D
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