Writing Commons Four: cinquain

Thursday, May 08, 2008

Hoping
Now
For life
One more day
To feel the breeze
Because the trees are singing

At May 15, 2008 at 10:37 PM, A. Heninger said...: I like it! everything looks grammatically correct. It'd be cool if the lines flowed a little better, but that's harder to do with this poem format.
At May 16, 2008 at 12:02 AM, Alie said...: This comment has been removed by the author.
At May 16, 2008 at 12:03 AM, Alie said...: You did a good job sticking to the structure.
At May 16, 2008 at 12:30 AM, amykathryn said...: Well, you followed the instructions to a tee, which is definitely commendable. You were able to paint a very lovely picture.