Writing Commons Four: Cinquain--WRITING 330

Tuesday, May 04, 2010

Sleeping

There

For her

One more hour

He dreams big dreams

She wanted him to

At May 5, 2010 at 4:53 PM, Kimberly said...: Hey! I think on the fourth line if you put "dreaming big dreams" that would fit better for a verb phrase. I like it!
At May 11, 2010 at 9:24 PM, Katie said...: I agree. The he doesn't quite fit... is there another subject that would work?
At May 12, 2010 at 10:53 AM, Zachery Smith said...: Yeah, the fourth line doesn't adhere to the adverbial cinquain format. Content wise though, it's really good.